Cool chapter, Shorty, but...

Posted by Goodsport from adsl-216-102-199-185.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net on January 11, 2000 at 20:00:21:

In Reply to: Chapter 4 posted by Short Round on January 11, 2000 at 18:18:24:

... I'll have to replace the 'Uzi' in your chapter (I'm assuming that's what you meant when you wrote 'oozie') with 'MP-10 submachinegun'. It turns out that the Uzi was developed in Israel (now THAT must have made Hitler turn in his grave! :D ) in the early 1950's, and wasn't issued until 1955. The German Army eventually adopted the Uzi as its official submachinegun, but not until a lot later! :)

On a side note, the Mini-Uzi wasn't issued until 1980 (just thought I'd throw that in).

As for that last scene (with Indiana Rigg's airplane)... is it all right if I change it somewhat? It somewhat conflicts with a lot of what happened before:

1) Goodsport just got there... and he's a private investigator, not a scuba-diver.

2) Indiana Riggs had just jumped out of the plane at the end of Chapter 3.

3) Goodsport's private-investigating partner was killed a month earlier, and Goodsport doesn't currently have a partner (only his name is written on the door of his office now, according to Chapter 1 - remember?).

4) Etc.

I promise to try and keep it as close as possible to your original vision, though. :)

Overall, great chapter. And I hope that you're feeling better soon! :D

-G

Follow Ups:

Actually... Goodsport 11:16:11 1/12/2000 (0)
Goody: who was your partner? D.C. 22:18:17 1/11/2000 (9)
- I apologize, Deirdre.... Goodsport 17:03:34 1/12/2000 (3)
  - Uh oh! It seems that Deirdre is angrier than I thought. :( (nm) Goodsport 00:20:36 1/13/2000 (2)
    - Me and angry? Argh... I haven't got a bad/evil/mad/grudging bone in my body... D.C. 01:41:45 1/13/2000 (1)
      - Re: Me and angry? Argh... I haven't got a bad/evil/mad/grudging bone in my body... Goodsport 01:43:28 1/13/2000 (0)
- Re: Goody: who was your partner? Goodsport 22:42:24 1/11/2000 (0)
- Re: Goody: who was your partner? Goodsport 22:24:11 1/11/2000 (3)
  - Ohh ok. D.C. 22:28:13 1/11/2000 (2)
    - Re: Ohh ok. Goodsport 22:30:43 1/11/2000 (1)
      - IRC vs. ICQ? Deirdre 22:45:06 1/11/2000 (0)
Uhhh... the MP-10 wasnt invented until long after the Uzi Goodsport, try something older. [nm] the Fiddler 22:09:44 1/11/2000 (1)
- Oops, I meant the MP-40! (nm) Goodsport 22:10:59 1/11/2000 (0)

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: ... I'll have to replace the 'Uzi' in your chapter (I'm assuming that's what you meant when you wrote 'oozie') with 'MP-10 submachinegun'. It turns out that the Uzi was developed in Israel (now THAT must have made Hitler turn in his grave! :D ) in the early 1950's, and wasn't issued until 1955. The German Army eventually adopted the Uzi as its official submachinegun, but not until a lot later! :)

: On a side note, the Mini-Uzi wasn't issued until 1980 (just thought I'd throw that in).

: As for that last scene (with Indiana Rigg's airplane)... is it all right if I change it somewhat?  It somewhat conflicts with a lot of what happened before:

: 1) Goodsport just got there... and he's a private investigator, not a scuba-diver.

: 2)  Indiana Riggs had just jumped out of the plane at the end of Chapter 3.

: 3) Goodsport's private-investigating partner was killed a month earlier, and Goodsport doesn't currently have a partner (only his name is written on the door of his office now, according to Chapter 1 - remember?).

: 4)  Etc.

: 
: I promise to try and keep it as close as possible to your original vision, though.   :)

: Overall, great chapter.  And I hope that you're feeling better soon!   :D

: 
: -G

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